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Hola. My name is Noah. I am a girl. G-I-R-L. Yeah. I'm a sophomore. I live in a small town. I walk to school, hang out with my friends, and ...

*I don't think it is quite right to have predesignated 'main characters' in a storybook, unless it is an RPG. Everyone should get limelight. And will you, fun4eva, be handling ...

Chapter Two: JACOB I picked at my soggy rice. It usually wasn't this difficult to eat Emmy's meals, but I had a lot on my mind. And when I say ...

This is my first post, and first chapter of my unfinished novel. It's told through two points of view: the male lead and the female lead. The next chapters will ...

*Grace* That was probably the weirdest performance I had ever been in. "Whoa, Grace. Fantastic," Blazefinger commented. His face lit up suddenly. "We should give you a name. Like mine--Blazefinger." ...

*Grace* I stood on my tiptoes as I watched Julianna blow fire-kisses, Randall set his nails on fire, and Joel give himself a fire-mohawk. Jonah could sense my tension. "It'll ...

*Grace* The rest of the fire-eaters who were traveling with me decided to stay behind for awhile, while I traveled ahead to watch for dangers. The Inn wasn't too far ...

Slightly confusing.... I get the suicidal part, but the 'love at first sight' part is...rough. Sorry, but everyone else seems to have gotten all the good critiquing. :wink: Kudos, I ...

I, no offense, disagree with timjim. I love the line "tears start to fall from you/like me from the sky". Even though it is a simile, which I find the ...

Whoa, baby that's deep. But deep is good. And I totally understood your metaphor. I wrote a report on succumbing to the demands of authority last year, and this has ...

It's good, except for the practicality of the whole theme. If she never went to her first day in Forks High, how could she have known all of the people ...

Grace The flames twisted around my tumbling body, and gently licked my skin. I felt no pain. They danced with my feet and played with my spinning arms. They wove ...

Is there room for one more? Sorry. I suck at math. If so... Name: Sophie Emberly Age: 21 Occupation: Photographer for Poppy United Magazine Hobbies: Snowboarding (when she gets the ...

Hi! Um, I know I don't know you personally, and I haven't read anything else by you, but WOW. That poem was beautiful! *hyperventilates* Poetry/Songwriting is one of the main ...

Ooh, creepy!!!! Swottielottie is basically right. The tense thing, the spelling of eleven was wrong. You have to put two spaces after every period and one space after every comma. ...